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First of all, this was very..pretty. I loved it all, except this: there is nothing like staring dead i mean, c'mon...you're better than this. it's like a play on words ...

every shell can hear the sound of the sea. even the smallest, the weakest and most brittle echo with ocean music. for some odd reason, i didn't like this. it ...

Expand on this. It's too short to provide a proper critique to this - each line is also sort of disjointed from the next. coupe cope start using punctuation. please ...

What's with all the monkey faces? Moving on - Don't judge me with just one glance, This girl laughs, and this girl crys, But I will spread my wings and ...

but than you cant but then you can't Grammatial, spelling and punctuation related flaws in this poem distracted me. Clean it up next time. I believe you have something with ...

at my core, and I realize this is why I will never forget you. i thought these should be together on the same line. Otherwise, this was beautiful. I felt ...

1) you need punctuation 2) you need a rhythmic pattern that fits with the rhyming pattern GOOD THINGS: you know your poetry well, as you have a feel for it, ...

stop trying to rhyme, because when you rhyme you usually should have a more steady rhythm...which isn't upheld in this poem.

I'm here I'm slipping on my dress fingers scraping skin this bedroom fall within a deadly drop just to carress my fears You press Your nervous and you sweat lips ...

The regular morbid child's poem. Minor suggestions: These things they did for a day more, to live and make it through. i just didn't get this. and was too smart ...

White, crisp pages in hand Your eyes swivel, survey A smile twists, a laugh bursts forth Facing me sternly, you whisper “Could you write something better?” There it is – ...

E is for Everlasting Stupidity, oh, come on! that's cheating! you have to think of something that actually starts with E. =]

i actually didn't think this was too short, which is something i usually do so...it's a compliment, i suppose. you made your point strong and quick, with a touch of ...

this was very disjointed. Shudder in this feeling of mine. Shudder. I would suggest you cut the extra "shudder". It doesn't hold dramatic effect.

Picture this - best friend - Red hair and innocent She’s entrapped in her boyfriend’s Spider web of arms We joke and laugh and Sip a soda in a myriad ...